From 0c01c9f5049474e7b05b7622f6187ed468762fa8 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Ceri Davies <ceri@FreeBSD.org>
Date: Sat, 18 Dec 2004 15:23:18 +0000
Subject: [PATCH] Some grammatical fixes from the PR below, and some more of my
 own.

PR:		docs/74624
Submitted by:	Gavin Atkinson <gavin dot atkinson at ury dot york dot ac dot uk>
---
 .../slides/common/freebsd-users.xml            | 18 +++++++++---------
 1 file changed, 9 insertions(+), 9 deletions(-)

diff --git a/en_US.ISO8859-1/slides/common/freebsd-users.xml b/en_US.ISO8859-1/slides/common/freebsd-users.xml
index dd584583c5..891e4501d5 100644
--- a/en_US.ISO8859-1/slides/common/freebsd-users.xml
+++ b/en_US.ISO8859-1/slides/common/freebsd-users.xml
@@ -1,9 +1,9 @@
 <!-- $FreeBSD$ -->
 
 <foilgroup>
-  <foil><title>Who uses FreeBSD?</title>
+  <foil><title>Who Uses FreeBSD?</title>
 
-    <para>FreeBSD is used by many of the worlds largest corporations,
+    <para>FreeBSD is used by many of the world's largest corporations,
       and busiest Internet sites.</para>
 
     <itemizedlist>
@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@
 
       <listitem>In the last year alone, about one million new FreeBSD
         hosts were counted by Netcraft, an incredible growth rate
-        despite more media attention for Linux.</listitem>
+        despite more media attention towards Linux.</listitem>
 
     </itemizedlist>
   </foil>
@@ -47,7 +47,7 @@
 
 	  <listitem>Source availability for helping understand and fix
 	    problems that occur (having the source to the
-	    system helps you understand why your application does not
+	    system helps you to understand why your application does not
 	    do what you expect)</listitem>
 
 	  <listitem>Good performance</listitem>
@@ -67,11 +67,11 @@
   </foil>
 
 
-  <foil><title>FreeBSD used for Internet Infrastructure</title>
+  <foil><title>FreeBSD Used for Internet Infrastructure</title>
 
     <itemizedlist>
 
-      <listitem>BSD has existed since the last 1970's and was the testbed
+      <listitem>BSD has existed since the late 1970's and was the testbed
         and reference implementation for TCP/IP.</listitem>
 
       <listitem>The Internet Software Consortium (ISC) uses FreeBSD
@@ -81,13 +81,13 @@
       <listitem>Modern FreeBSD is extremely refined and
         mature.</listitem>
 
-      <listitem>FreeBSD consistently placed at the top of the "uptime"
+      <listitem>FreeBSD consistently places at the top of the "uptime"
         lists produced by Netcraft to measure the stability of the
         world's busiest websites.</listitem>
    </itemizedlist>
   </foil>
 
-  <foil><title>Embedded uses of FreeBSD</title>
+  <foil><title>Embedded Uses of FreeBSD</title>
 
     <itemizedlist>
 
@@ -108,4 +108,4 @@
 
     </itemizedlist>
   </foil>
-</foilgroup>
\ No newline at end of file
+</foilgroup>