From c2549ffaf53a679e1a88a02c0e6aa7a7ac1ed98a Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Adam Weinberger <adamw@FreeBSD.org>
Date: Sun, 2 May 2004 21:37:12 +0000
Subject: [PATCH] Wording tweaks.

---
 en/gnome/index.xsl | 30 +++++++++++++++++-------------
 1 file changed, 17 insertions(+), 13 deletions(-)

diff --git a/en/gnome/index.xsl b/en/gnome/index.xsl
index dac21b10dc..4153132870 100644
--- a/en/gnome/index.xsl
+++ b/en/gnome/index.xsl
@@ -1,4 +1,4 @@
-<!-- $FreeBSD: www/en/gnome/index.xsl,v 1.49 2004/04/05 02:14:09 adamw Exp $ -->
+<!-- $FreeBSD: www/en/gnome/index.xsl,v 1.50 2004/04/08 04:09:48 marcus Exp $ -->
 
 <xsl:stylesheet xmlns:xsl="http://www.w3.org/1999/XSL/Transform"
 		xmlns:rdf="http://www.w3.org/1999/02/22-rdf-syntax-ns#"
@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@
   <xsl:import href="includes.xsl"/>
 
   <xsl:variable name="base" select="'..'"/>
-  <xsl:variable name="date" select="'$FreeBSD: www/en/gnome/index.xsl,v 1.49 2004/04/05 02:14:09 adamw Exp $'"/>
+  <xsl:variable name="date" select="'$FreeBSD: www/en/gnome/index.xsl,v 1.50 2004/04/08 04:09:48 marcus Exp $'"/>
   <xsl:variable name="title" select="'FreeBSD GNOME Project'"/>
 
   <xsl:output type="html" encoding="iso-8859-1"
@@ -96,19 +96,22 @@
 
 			  <p>GNOME 2.6 has hit the ports tree!  Read the
 				<a href="docs/faq26.html">Upgrade FAQ</a> for upgrade
-				instructions.  Be sure to use the
+				instructions, and be sure to use the
 				<a href="gnome_upgrade.sh">upgrade script</a>!</p>
 
               <h2><font color="#990000">What is GNOME?</font></h2>
               <img src="{$base}/gnome/images/gnome.png" align="right"
                    border="0" alt="GNOME Logo"/>
 
-			 <p>The GNOME project has created an entirely free, easy-to-use
-			   desktop environment and a user-friendly suite of applications, available
-			   for many different free systems.  The FreeBSD GNOME Project brings
-			   GNOME to FreeBSD.</p>
+	   		<p>GNOME is a free, attractive, powerful,
+			  fully integrated, and easy-to-use desktop
+			  environment, and an associated
+			  comprehensive suite of applications.
+			  The FreeBSD GNOME Project is a team of
+			  committers and users that brings GNOME to
+			  FreeBSD.</p>
 
-			  <p>The major components of GNOME Project are:</p>
+			  <p>The major components of GNOME are:</p>
               <ul>
                 <li>The <a href="http://www.gnome.org">GNOME desktop</a>:  An easy
                   to use window-based environment for users.</li>
@@ -119,16 +122,17 @@
                   Office</a>:  A set of office productivity applications.</li>
               </ul>
 
-			  <p>For more information about what GNOME is and isn't, check out
-				the GNOME Project's
-				<a href="http://www.gnome.org/about/">About GNOME page</a>.</p>
+			  <p>For more information about GNOME, check out
+			    the GNOME Project's
+			    "<a href="http://www.gnome.org/about/">What is GNOME?</a>"
+			    page.</p>
 
               <h2><font color="#990000">State of the port</font></h2>
 
 	      <p>GNOME for FreeBSD is currently supported on 4.9, 5.2,
 		-STABLE, and -CURRENT.  Most of GNOME has been ported to
-		FreeBSD; however, there is
-		<a href="docs/volunteer.html">plenty left to do</a>!</p>
+		FreeBSD, but there is still
+		<a href="docs/volunteer.html">plenty left to be done</a>!</p>
 
             </td>